These are 2 e-mail's that will be sent out to new or potential customers. We are a waste handling equipment company The one labeled service pm is for a specific program to enroll customers in and the other one labeled service work is to build up our service dept. Thanks for taking a look.
I checked out both emails. I thought the PM email lacked color and could have benefited from a bigger palette. I liked that it was short and to the point. I would have included the link to the checklist in the article block that mentions it.
My favorite part of the service work email was the "Did You Know" section. It's always great when you can share a little known fact or tip with your contacts.
I would watch out with the white text when using that template. The template's background is a background image and some email clients, like Outlook 2007, will not display them. If it does not display the background image, your background will be white and it will appear as if the email's blank. Using a different color font or going into Global Colors and Fonts and changing the background color of the template will prevent this issue from happening.
Thanks for sharing!
I wouls stay with the format on your first email. You have to remeber you are sending this to potential customers. Or propecting. You really should only key on the Top 3 things you do. The second email has to many words. Reading it I lost interest quickly. You should offer some type of incentive to get them do use your service.
It doesnt have to be a discount but maybe a service you do better than anyone else.
Other than that the email is good your on the right track.
In general, I would encourage you to make these shorter, so readers can see important info. at a glance. I liked the look and layout of service work a bit more, because the column format let me, as a reader, decide which topic was most relevant to me.
For service PM version, consider bolding key terms or phrases, so folks can see at a glance (2 seconds) what the gist is about.
Shorter, more frequent updates work best.
This is the new version of service pm. It's still a draft so I hope the link works. I left in the original text but I moved it around and added graphics.
Thanks to all of you for your feed back I'm lookiong forward to some more.
The second version is looking better, however, these are some pointers you might want to consider:
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Thanks for the suggestions. One thing is we are currently planning a wholesale overhaul of our website but I definitely will keep the color matching in mind on future emails. Also what do you mean by including the nav bar from the website?
Where would something like that go in the email?
Thanks agian for the help.
Glad you found the feedback worthwhile. You can see navigation bars in these emails:
And more information here: http://www.solutionsforgrowthllc.com/email_marketing.html
Best of luck and don't hesitate to get in touch if I can be of help.
Solutions for Growth