We're about to send our first email next Friday, and we'd love your feedback on our initial contact to our friends/coworkers/fans. We make funny videos online, and we're starting a brand new phase of production. We're trying to keep it simple, and focus on the content rather than making it too wordy, but felt like a commitment/disclaimer was important in the initial contact.
Your first email looks great! I do see that at the top of your email you are asking people to Opt into to your email marketing list. Your mailing should be permission based and have customers that have already Opted into your email list before you send your first email.
If you have a mailing list that is not permission and would like to know how to get those contacts on your mailing list follow this FAQ.
Thanks for checking us out. Not sure if I'm entirely clear about what our company is. We are not selling anybody anything. This email list is comprised of people we correspond with on a routine basis: family/friends/colleagues, not customers. The videos we send in emails are on Youtube, and are free to all. Our goal is to use our email list to let our friends know when we've put up a video.