Overall, looks good. A couple of things to think about. You really need a call to action. . .You do a great job selling the service, but don't tell them what to do next. Try putting a "click through" link in the letter. Tell them to click here to sign up or something like that. If they do not have an easy way to get to you, they may close the email and think of it no more. The best time to get them to go to your site is while they are reading the newsletter.
Hope this helps.
Rookie here too! I see a missing ? after "did you know...." Also I'd put the Top 5 reasons closer to the top,(between the first & second paragraph) they draw attention much more than the opening sentence.
Hi Sarah - I assume this is a promotional email. In the 2nd box below the name and logo I would add a few important benefits of your services in lieu of "Let Protection Point..."
Remember your reader may have a very busy email inbox, so you need to break through the clutter in a few seconds. Good, strong benefits can give them a reason to keep reading. In fact, the upper half of the email is really important. It's commonly referred to "as above the fold."
Also, look at your subject line. Think of the number one reason people reach out to your company and buy your services. For example, "Move your inventory quicker!"