advice on Sherbrooke Foundation intro email

Hello, I would be interested in feedback on this intro email for our foundation donors, for our long-term care home. I'm developing a solicitation email to go out at the end of May and could use actionable comments about length, functionality, design, subject line etc. thank you! https://conta.cc/4cnMJe7 

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