Yoga Retreats to Croatia, Sardinia & Senegal Campaign Feedback Request

[RuahB2]

Greetings,

I would love to hear any feedback on my latest email HERE.

I generally send a similar format where I spend the first part of the email sharing my latest retreats and/or workshops and then I share a personal message with practical guidance or tips related to the theme of what I am teaching in my real-life classes. 

I used to include a lot more information and my emails were much longer. I'm working on making them shorter and more focused but think I can do much better. Editing things out is my Achilles heel!

I would love to hear any advice or feedback from others or the CC team.

Thank you in advance for your time and attention.

Warm regards,

Ruah

www.ruahyoga.com

@ruahyoga

[Chris-S]

Hey @RuahB2 

Hey, the email draft is looking great! You’ve got a really friendly tone going on and a nice zen vibe but could use a pinch of spice for flair! Here are some tweaks:

1. Content Flow: The flow between the breathing exercises and the retreat amenities could be improved. A more obvious transition could be made to emphasize the significance of finding balance through the breathwork and how the retreats can enhance this pursuit. Or something more witty, "Breathe in, breathe out… now imagine doing that in a hammock overlooking the mountains. Yup, we've got that covered."

2. Call to Action (CTA): Make sure to really emphasize the retreat section. You talk about an early bird deal, but if you make it clear that spots are limited and exclusive, it'll make the call to action even more convincing.

3. Visual Appeal: Breaking up text-heavy sections with more imagery or subheadings could enhance readability and visual engagement. Specifically in the "Dear Friends.” 

Keep the chill tone, but sprinkle in some light-hearted charm!