Hey @RuahB2 Hey, the email draft is looking great! You’ve got a really friendly tone going on and a nice zen vibe but could use a pinch of spice for flair! Here are some tweaks:
Content Flow: The flow between the breathing exercises and the retreat amenities could be improved. A more obvious transition could be made to emphasize the significance of finding balance through the breathwork and how the retreats can enhance this pursuit. Or something more witty, "Breathe in, breathe out… now imagine doing that in a hammock overlooking the mountains. Yup, we've got that covered."
Call to Action (CTA): Make sure to really emphasize the retreat section. You talk about an early bird deal, but if you make it clear that spots are limited and exclusive, it'll make the call to action even more convincing.
Visual Appeal: Breaking up text-heavy sections with more imagery or subheadings could enhance readability and visual engagement. Specifically in the "Dear Friends.”
Keep the chill tone, but sprinkle in some light-hearted charm!
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